I.4 Twice
I.4 TWICEIn 1937 at the age of fourteen in a dusty yearfather ran twice away from Michigan,twice across the empty gut of America,twice to escape a house of ignorance and pain.Once tumbleweeding to his...
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Not Cairo, Egypt, I take it. (or if so, maybe punctuation in the line before, to separate these continents?) I very much like the way the son feels as if he's almost crossed paths/caught up with with...
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This line is a stumbler for me, but the rest is fabulous: I have turned to his quick to run spirit once or twice. The tumbleweeding and busty farm are so original!
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Thanks for the input. Cairo, Illinois - where one can cross the mighty Mississippi into Missouri over a great bridge. Always love that crossing when driving between Michigan and Texas. "I have turned...
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re: his quick to run spirit - maybe it's a function of not using punctuation there - a reader has to accustom to the lack.quick-to-run would be easier to read, though I grant you, not as nice looking.
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tumbleweeding to his grandfather’s ranch >> nice! What's a busty farm? I wondered if it might be a typo for busy. I have felt the western tug on his broken heart >> This is lovely! Don't...
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Really like this and got right away that busty referred to Aunt Margie: In 1937 at the age of fourteen in a dusty year father ran twice away from Michigan, twice across the empty gut of America, twice...
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